SP Narrative writing

WALT:  Follow the sequence of Narrative writing

This one bright sunny day on a lovely farm up at Paparore road.  with some delicious fruit like bananas, apples and some pears.  There was a Cat, a Dog,and a Cow. The Cow’s name is David, the Cat’s name is Buddy and the Dog’s name is Mana. They were all friends. The Cat  is really good at catching food like mice, the Dog is really good at being sneaky and the Cow is really good at being super tall. So it was lunchtime and suddenly the dog wanted something off the tree.

                                                    

The Dog was super hunger he felt like a banana so he tried to reach the banana from the banana tree but the poor Dog could not reach the banana so the dog strolled right over to cat and said “Good day’’ said the dog the cat answered with a ‘’Good thank you’’ said the cat the dog had a question the dog said “Cat could you get that banana in the tree please?’’ said the dog. The cat replied with ‘’No!’’ and  the dog asked ‘’Why?’’ The cat said ‘’You really want to know?’’ said the cat the dog responded with ‘’yes!’’ the cat said  ‘’It's because you're annoying’’ spoke the cat, so the dog matched away from  the cat  he was extremely mad like  a shark  then he walked up to the cow and said.

‘’Greetings  cow’’ said the dog the cow said with a nice smile the cow replied with a ‘’Howdy’’ said  the friendly cow then the Cow asked ‘’What could I  do for you today my friend?’’ said the cow the dog then said ‘’Could you please get down that banana down from the tree please the cow then replied with “Of course I will’’ said the cow so the cow then said “Hop on my back’’ said the cow the dog the replied with “Thank you so much cow’’ spock the dog the cow replied with “ No problem my friend’’ so the dog hopped on the cows back so the cow walked over to the tree so dog could reach the banana the dog got the banana the dog  had then said “Thank you so much” the cow respond with “No worries my mate” so the dog slided down his back and the dog could not stop thanking cow the cow kept saying stop then finally he had stopped so he ate his banana and the Dog was happy like a bird so the Cow had then walked away the so the cow walked back to his grass. So they all lived joyfully ever after. On the lovely farm  

Self Assessment: 

What I liked about  my writing

• I like that I was allowed to use my imagination 

• I also like that we could be creative 

• I like that we can have fun with it.

What I need to do improve my writing 

• I need to improve my proof-reading skills 

• I need to work on finishing my work on time 

• I need to stay focussed and on task for longer periods